heres a song off my upcoming album.  I wanted to make a controversial song to spark open an honest conversations.  verse one was written by me.  TRIGGER WARNNING OFFINCIVE AND DEROGETORY TERMS WERE USED.

-CP

I can't concentrate on the lyrics. That's not your fault sorry. It's me. I am more concentrating on the rhythm, the emotion and the production.
Lovely bells, bit repetitive and dry to me. After 4 min. it turns flat. Missing a "hook" like a refrain or so or a strange sound at certain points. Just to make a contrast like a wave all over the song.
I can feel emoitions although there is much room for more.
I wouldn't use the downpitched voice in the background on the whole track. Just on certain phrases or words to emphasize them to the front.
And I have to listen to it a few times to get the message.
Thanks for your upload