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| The Actor |
Hey everybody I was wondering if I could get some feedback on this song I wrote (please watch the video, it gives the song another vibe! plus it took a lot of hard work haha):
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=swogYqd_xb0
Lyrics:
Everyday I wear a mask
And play chess with kings and gnomes
Acting on stage, as if i knew my name
but deep down inside in the rabbit hole
Im lost in a maze
Its falling falling
I might be, insane
Im calling, calling
Help from above
Push from below
Please show please show me
Who's the actorx2
Ohhh
Everyday I accelarate
Not quite sure if i wanna crash
Its shining bright
But it burns my eyes
Name calling, start a fight
I'm not quite sure if its
Red or green
Boom its done
Im in the scene
Im screaming, im screaming
Can't rationalize
I'm bleeding, im bleeding
Someone save my life
Help from above
Push from below
Please show please show me
Who's the driver
Ohhh
Please show please show me
Who's the passenger
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=swogYqd_xb0
Lyrics:
Everyday I wear a mask
And play chess with kings and gnomes
Acting on stage, as if i knew my name
but deep down inside in the rabbit hole
Im lost in a maze
Its falling falling
I might be, insane
Im calling, calling
Help from above
Push from below
Please show please show me
Who's the actorx2
Ohhh
Everyday I accelarate
Not quite sure if i wanna crash
Its shining bright
But it burns my eyes
Name calling, start a fight
I'm not quite sure if its
Red or green
Boom its done
Im in the scene
Im screaming, im screaming
Can't rationalize
I'm bleeding, im bleeding
Someone save my life
Help from above
Push from below
Please show please show me
Who's the driver
Ohhh
Please show please show me
Who's the passenger
Nice song, I watched the video (and commented)
Lyrical content kind of reflects on your ambitious attitude, which is surely a good thing, abstract imagery and stereotypes, looks like you are figuring things out on a large scale. Neat! I wonder where it will lead you.
Keep at it! And welcome to the Amp, hope you'll enjoy yourself!
Lyrical content kind of reflects on your ambitious attitude, which is surely a good thing, abstract imagery and stereotypes, looks like you are figuring things out on a large scale. Neat! I wonder where it will lead you.
Keep at it! And welcome to the Amp, hope you'll enjoy yourself!
You gotta good thing going here - you've got your own style and interpretation.
Go with it to the max and see where it takes you.
For acoustic stuff like this, less ambience is generally better, then it becomes more intimate - try it.
The video is great, but would have liked more in the frame, like you playing the guitar.
Go with it to the max and see where it takes you.
For acoustic stuff like this, less ambience is generally better, then it becomes more intimate - try it.
The video is great, but would have liked more in the frame, like you playing the guitar.
PuppetXeno wrote…
Nice song, I watched the video (and commented)
Lyrical content kind of reflects on your ambitious attitude, which is surely a good thing, abstract imagery and stereotypes, looks like you are figuring things out on a large scale. Neat! I wonder where it will lead you.
Keep at it! And welcome to the Amp, hope you'll enjoy yourself!
Thank you bro! I wrote this song sort of subconsciously, so perhaps I am figuring out things without even realizing. :p
Look forward to hearing from you, see ya!
| re: great song |
swordfish wrote…
howzabout being part of the community too!!
Denis wrote…
You gotta good thing going here - you've got your own style and interpretation.
Go with it to the max and see where it takes you.
For acoustic stuff like this, less ambience is generally better, then it becomes more intimate - try it.
The video is great, but would have liked more in the frame, like you playing the guitar.
Thank you Denis! I see what you mean. Perhaps I shall experiment with more clean, acoustic style mixes and still frame videos. Thank you once again, looking forward to hear more from you
Iszil wrote…
It doesn't sound bad I need a hook or something. I couldn't get a grip of the song. It might because of what Denis mentioned about the lack of intimacy due to the recording.
But it's still a good job.
Cheers.
> Ish
I see... Thank you for the constructive criticism. I'll try to construct more intimacy in my next rec. Cheers
Great song with catchy feel ,1 guitar 1 vox straight up way to go.
Really like your vocal dynamics & expression = engaging .
Re ambience intimacy ; myself heard this as live concert sound avec a bit of natural verb , tho the close mic presence may reveal another layer. Thanks for posting really enjoyed
Really like your vocal dynamics & expression = engaging .
Re ambience intimacy ; myself heard this as live concert sound avec a bit of natural verb , tho the close mic presence may reveal another layer. Thanks for posting really enjoyed
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