played with the mix added an outro...I know enough already

Better Much Better!!!! it is a lot less 'congested' two thumbs up seriously this should be a DDR song w8 I'm going to step this into Stepmania for my PC...oh yeah good job but 1:17 take the d-tort out it blows  nice outro

awesome cool! love the guitar in there! sounding much fatter, getting to industrial techno here, veeeery niiice! reminds me of my first contact with Chemlab... what was that song called again? .... . . . . .. . . . . ahhh, not right now I think.

Anyway! super cool stuff! more of this please

i like the V2.0 better than the former version. reminds me of the mortal kombat sound track. techno is not what i normally put up with, but this one is awesome with the guitars put in. the sudden change into the outro is a very good variation. the whole thing is impressive. may be you should put this version into the battle.

I didn't hear your original version to this if it is still on this forum I am going to check it out
so that I can compare like everyone else

Your outro may need to be blended better but overall it is very well done
the mix sounds fine to me.    - Mark from GRUNTLED
 

Well thanks, I entered it in the November battle.



Thanks!

sure will vote for this.........good music

top end of warm ...............see guide 2 rating songs

fun sound

thanx

the fish

OK, just listened to the first version of this and thought it pretty good......  this one has been tidied up a bit it seems.  The addition of the guitar very good - and I like the ending (although think I would have had that as a 12 bar break, and brought the techno stuff back in had I done it). 
But this gets a couple more points in the votes from me because of the improvements

Pro: There's a lot of good ideas in this. If I was in a club and this came on I could have a lot of fun with it.

Con: I listened to this twice and I didn't hear a song in it anywhere. I wouldn't want to put this on in my car stereo.

Suggestions:  Kill that last wierd part that starts at 2:45


Here's the problem I see.  You have like 5 sections that are so different from each other that they don't combine to form something memorable (each of the sections though is good).  If I were you I'd take the entire thing apart and start building from each chunk.(with chord changes, vocals heavily processed with effects, etc...)

If your aim is not to produce "songs" then disregard all of the above.