This song isn't about anybody in particular... just because of the name "Valentine" doesn't mean it's about someone with that name... I mean... that's just coincidental okay?!

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anyways, I plan to re record this song... I'd like some ideas from my fellow bandampers... please... go ahead, add ideas, please tell me if this song works for you, and how you'd like to hear it I'd love to incorporate all comments for a new version

ah hear the phone rings
time for a night out
fragile hearts await to break like glass on
classy smiles and
aerosol touch of plastic warmth
enthusiastic spasms of a lovelife on the thresh
of lifting off...

she paints her face down with red and sticky glue
wrapped around her eyes it looks like
wings of butterflies
look at all the flesh displayed
all this ecstasy unveiled
"run away with me," her body screams,
"you will be pleased to please, please me"

she's a happy valentine
such a happy valentine

kisses, hugs and funny talk
electrifies the air
look at her attention span,
"what with who and why and where?"
a gazillion pretty friends to give her
all the love she needs
in the centre of the universe she says:
"it's just ol' silly little
ME"

it's a happy valentine
such a happy valentine

enjoy

please comment... I want to re-do this song, I'd appreciate any suggestions how-to an whatnot, I'd love to make it sound completely different!

really cool (=
fast and hard xD

Why techno rhythm? The vocals are fine :-)

Yep, all sounds good to me. The mix sounds great, nice effects, I really like the fading pitch effects and vocal overlays. I'm kinda with you like I am with JBP. I really don't have any critiques bc I don't know how I would change it. And you both have a clear focus and direction from what you want to accomplish and then you do it. And, obviously, you know sooo much more than me when it comes to production
So, what do I say... ummm, "It's a cool song, I like it"

If you don't know it yet, i would recommend Moon Lay Hidden... i think you would dig that! this song is a bit techno/neofolk to me. wich is great -- i never heard that combo before!

I think that the best thing about your song are the lyrics, and the way you sing' em (

this is good stuff!
no further comment needed....except for that electronic drumsound ...
and my compliments ofcourse

ahh your voice is so cool. Reminds me a bit of Dave Gahan.. hope this doesn't bother you :-)

Thanks... Dave Gahan, isn't that a Basildon bloke?

Impressive.  It's quite a feat to be able to translate one's musical ideas to such an electronic sound.  I wish I could do it...instead I just get frustrated...

Anyway, about the song itself...the only things I might suggest are putting something in the 1:30 area...I hear the background vocals but they are not enough to satisfy in this song.  The power of the vocals throughout the song makes that lull kind of boring (comparatively).  And my second suggestion: perhaps a high falsetto voice (yes another voice) over some of the verse (particularly "...await to break like glass on classy smiles...").  I'd be real interested to hear what that would do to your song.

Very good song all around.  I wish I had the same mastery of the technical/producing side of the recording process that you have.

ps thanks for my review! I really appreciate it!