oh my...

i just read these... and i got threw the first line and i blushed madley... i almost coudent go on reading... then i started to read the comments and had to read the rest of it to know what every one was talking about... and yes, boys will be boys, and people have been known to write some riske lyrics, my self included... but jesus man keep it in your pants... for gods sakes isnt this woman twice your age? go find your sef a nice bleach blond that has "bonafide skank" written on her forhead, go out with her, and settle those teenage hormones you have... but PLEASE if you write a song about it... dont put it up on the amp unless its wattered down k?

but any way.... onto the constructive crtis... i thought this was way to short (that may be a good thing for his song seeing as how by the time it finished we would have found out that the woman you um er how to put it nicley?... did the "horizontal deed" with had your babies...)

other than that some lines didnt make since... i think your a good writer izzy and your a kick @$$ guitarest... just put it nicly on band amp, and keep it that way untill your in one of those big rock bands and people dont mind so much when you say things like that k?

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